tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782141968012811043.post4028295676051971544..comments2023-05-15T15:13:13.914+01:00Comments on <strike>Empty </strike>White Pages: I know I said I wouldn't but I didSarah Tokeleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13273148070092101085noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782141968012811043.post-77366743147600009492011-06-13T23:22:17.101+01:002011-06-13T23:22:17.101+01:00Thanks for your comments Patsy, I agree the ending...Thanks for your comments Patsy, I agree the ending isn't quite right. I think I was trying to be a bit too clever in not revealing who he was yet still getting the '50' in there somewhere!Sarah Tokeleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13273148070092101085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3782141968012811043.post-87644567615304200212011-06-12T11:17:30.749+01:002011-06-12T11:17:30.749+01:00I like the story. Felt great sympathy for him a th...I like the story. Felt great sympathy for him a thought you did a great job of giving clues as to what was happening.<br /><br />The maybe lets it down slightly. It's always difficult to finish off a story where the main character is already dead though. <br /><br />Only suggestion is to have him thinking that he's not going to escape again just before he's killed, so you don't have to tell so much.Patsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263765378083045973noreply@blogger.com